Please check my design #28463568 and let me know, If need any more changes please advise me and don't hesitate to ask for a revision.
Thanks!

Dear Honorable Sir,

Have a great day.

possible feedback on my design #28472647 would be much-appreciated .

I hope you'll love my concept.

Please don't be hesitate to ask for revision if you need any changes.

Regards.

(In case if you don't like my concept, Just let me know I'll go with a different approach)