Good day,
I have submitted a design for your consideration.
If you could provide some feedback on it, that would be great.
I'll start working on any changes you may want made to it as soon as possible.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Regards,
Q

Looking forward to your feedback, if on right track or not.
Kindest Regards

Hi,

I've just submitted a first proposal for your logo, can you please provide me some feedback ?

Thanks in advance for your advice, I'm at your service for any revision.

Kind regards,
Raoul